What is your feedback on this?

Very immature. No action, no conflict, a grocery list of what you do to get ready,too much description. What is the purpose of your story? Why are you writing it and who is your audience.?There's no hook, The setting is uninteresting. Who cares about your character? Why would someone take their dad to a job interview? Is he a ghost. That would make more sense. Somewhere to start. Now you just have a big jumble of words no one is interested in. Do you do any research? Do you read any writer's magazines or journals? Go to writersdigest.com to read tips on dialogue, scene, conflict, etc.